Hmmm...
It's not reall entertaining, but there is effort put into this.
Art/Animation: 7/10
First, there's need to smoothen the objects (the humans). The movement, however, was good. It was basic art, so everything should be smooth. The mouth movement were not good, they should be at one place, and not moving around the face.
Music/Voice: 8/10
The voices were not really good. First is because you could basically hear the air hitting the mic. To prevent this, stand 1 meter away from the mic and speak loudly. The music was good, no denying that.
Plot: 8/10
It was plain boring, but since it's a series, it'll be a good beginner. However, it's recommended to put 1 and 2 in one flash (or three in one) since one chapter doesn't use that much space. Therefore it would be better for the viewer since he doesn't have to click through two/three submissions.
Overall, a 7/10, 3/5. Major improvement for the animation and mic needed to make the animation better.
It's hard to offer a lot of critisism on this, since the plot is part of a series.
~The Liberaten
~The Review Request Club
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